Pairing: Vince/E
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers: Up to Entourage 4x01
Notes: 13.000 words. This story diverges from canon right after 4x01, as soon as the gang gets back from Colombia.
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solo____, dancinbutterfly and iamnotnormal. Thank you again! :-)Summary: Vince loses his Zen, it's all E's fault, and Vince is simply not going to put up with it.
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Zen and the Art of Scheming
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I love the description of the way E is wired like a girl
Yeah, it drives Vince to distraction sometimes when E's overthinking things again or insists on doing things the hard way, but hey. It's E, so what can you do. ;-)
I love his outlook in canon - and often wish I had some of his Zen. :-) I'm glad that his outlook in the story worked, too!
there were a bunch of times where Eric did or said something and I was like "That is so E!"
That is *wonderful* to hear - because at times I was worried that I was short-changing E. Vince has a very distinctive voice and is very bound up in scheming and in his own thoughts and emotions, and I feared that in some parts of the story, E might not be enough of a presence.
Which is why it's really good to know that he was so much himself. :-)
I'm totally useless with comments
No, I don't think you are at all! :-) Thank you very much for your lovely feedback!
Love your icon, btw. :-)
Wow, that's a truly lovely way to put it! Thank you for phrasing it so perfectly. Yes, that's really exactly what happened, isn't it? :-)
So perfect, so right for them.
I'm very glad! It's great that the story worked so well for you - I'd hoped to be able to convince readers that it could actually happen just like this. *g*
Thank you very much for your lovely feedback! :-)
*the not them... ^_^ I'm overly anal...
Yayness
really, really hot
Ooh, really? That's great! :-)
Vince is just besotted and smiling and adjusting his usual relationship gifts
Well now, Vince wouldn't really want to say 'besotted', exactly. 'Ridiculously happy', certainly. 'Glad to have E back full-time', definitely. Maybe just a bit 'stunned at his own good fortune'. And of course he wants E to know all that because E is a sucker for that kind of thing. But there's really no call to use the word 'besotted'. ;-)
Me, now, I think that Vince is most definitely besotted, and am very happy that the ending worked so well for you, too. :-)
Ooh, really? That's great! :-) I'm really glad the story worked so well for you - and in particular that Vince, E and their interaction seemed canon-ish. Well, canon-ish except for the on-screen sex, that is. ;-)
A big part of the fun of slash for me is to see if it's possible to keep the characters in character and just shift things so that the slash falls inevitably into place. I'm very happy this seems to have worked here. :-)
Vince's schemes were hilarious and sweet.
He tried so hard! And hey, E's happy and besotted and back with Vince full time. Not so bad for an amateur, huh? *g*
Love your icon. :-)
especially the parts where Vince contemplates his scheming
Hey, Vince may be an amateur, but look at the results: E's exclusive attention firmly fixed on Vince, around-the-clock company provided by happy and obliging E (or, you know, as obliging an E as E can ever be), and great sex into the bargain. Not much to argue with there. ;-)
and the Scene sub-titles
I confess that I'm rather fond of those myself, and I'm very glad that they worked for you, too, and weren't just self-indulgent. :-)
1) The three things. I love Vince's three things. I love how E is the most important of his three things. Its a little sad though. Cause really, I think Vince actually is a fairly good actor. *pets him*
2)I will never stop loving SPQR. I think that should be their next project in canon. I wanna see Vinny Chase shag a slave boy. ^-~ That must make me a bad person. I dont care.
3)"E's room" *tries not to cry* he loves his E so much.
4) Aw! He's alone at night. He just needs to be loved.
5)Ah. The Dunkin' Donuts scene. I wish it would stop being so brilliant. But lo, it does not it continues to be fantastic and your characterization of Ari and I love how you're getting Vince to be deep while not removing any of his shallowness. To quote Daniel Tosh "There's no depth to my shallowness"
6)"tell Sloan to ease up on E because she's screwing with his Vince time" - I would DIE to see her reaction to that.
7)Tarantino is made of love and win.
8)*wants to read girl!Eric fic, wherein she's an Erica and Vince is like...horribly in love with her now*
9)BAKED GOODS! *wants cake*
10)It's not that E's not attractive, because he is. Vince'd totally do E, if E was a girl. Or if Vince was a girl. In fact, if either of them was a girl, Vince would have done E already – ten, fifteen years ago or something, probably pretty much as soon as they'd both hit puberty. This continues to be one of my all time favorite paragraphs. Because its basically a summation of what we can see on the screen. If either of them were female, they'd have been married at 18 and would be celebrating their 12/13th wedding anniversary by this point. And yes, there's a dark part of me that really wants to see that.
11)"E would totally do me, right?"
Johnny looks like he's about to swallow his tongue, so Vince clarifies. "If I was a girl. Or if he was. You know?"
His brother stares at him for a moment longer before shaking his head and shifting, looking around almost as though he was planning to bolt. "Uh. I guess?" AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! *snorfle* *snort* *hysterical, uncontrolled giggles because i can SEE Drama's FACE in that scene, all contorted and confused! Its such a great peice of dialogue. Fuck Ellin, you're writing the show from now on.
12) two words - octopuses?(octopi?)
13) E's flipped up Vince's collar, knotted his tie, and tucked the collar neatly down over it again That's such a deeply married thing to do.
14)love the zipper detail of Vince's. Again - they're SO married.
15) The sniff - you are SO gone Vince. *ruffles his hair*
16)which dinosaur is the coolest, but E is totally full of it and roots for the stegosaurus, of all the ridiculous things. That is such an unbelievably cute detail. Its so them. How the fuck did i miss that the first time around?!?! Shame one me!
17) Adam Levine shares his villa with his BFF. I'm noticing a pattern....hmmm...
18)Glenda: are you a good witch or a bad witch?!
19)Again with "if e were a girl" *sigh* oh Vince
20)The Aquaman thing never, ever, EVER stops being so fucking awesome that I could die.
21)I love of all of Scene Seven. Period.
22)If he were operating at anything like full brain capacity, Vince would be horrified, because begging for a pity fuck like a horny high school virgin is even less cool than copying Aquaman's moves. Its so gorgeous. Its just amazing. And the fact that he;s thinking what he'll get is a pity fuck is deeply sad.
23)He licks his nose and I die of the "Awwww!"
24)I love that Vince has magic sex that makes E realize "omg i've been in love with you since the beginning - duh" its so how it would go down, too.
25)The twinkie of love *sigh*
26)I wanna be there when he tells Ari
27)Really, fuck Zen. This is so much better than Zen. Its like candy and love and I hope you never ever EVER stop writing ever.
Its a little sad though. Cause really, I think Vince actually is a fairly good actor.
So do I - but you don't have to don't feel bad for him! He doesn't actually have self-esteem issues, he's just very laid-back and down-to-earth about the entire movie star hype. :-)
I wanna see Vinny Chase shag a slave boy.
LOL! I don't think that particular scene's in the script... but hey, maybe Vince can convince E to dress up as a slave boy some evening. If he's really, really persuasive. And has a very tempting bribe in mind. ;-)
he loves his E so much.
He totally does. Fortunately E is every bit as nuts about him. And Vince knows it. ;-)
I love how you're getting Vince to be deep while not removing any of his shallowness.
*blush* Wow, thank you, that's a really wonderful compliment! I'm incredibly happy that my Vince characterization works that well for you - I was initially a bit nervous whether other people would like his voice here at all. It's an enormous relief that he's true to himself, in all his sweet, shallow deepness! ;-)
I would DIE to see her reaction to that.
Vince: "Sloan, you gotta ease up on E. You're screwing with his Vince time, and that's just wrong, you know?"
Sloan *stares at Vince for long moments*: "Vince. Thank you for your input. I assure you I will give it all the consideration it deserves."
*wants to read girl!Eric fic, wherein she's an Erica and Vince is like...horribly in love with her now*
E'd make a cool girl, yeah, but hey, it's not like Vince has anything against the boy package. Also, if E were a girl other guys would be hitting on him all the time, and that'd probably get old really fast. Guys are total horndogs. Vince should know. :-)
If either of them were female, they'd have been married at 18 and would be celebrating their 12/13th wedding anniversary by this point.
Hm, I don't know if they're the marrying-at-18 kind... but they'd certainly have been both all wrapped up in each other (as they are now) AND sleeping together. I tend to agree with Vince, though, that their relationship would have been a lot more rocky with sex added to the mix that early on. So maybe it's better this way. ;-)
i can SEE Drama's FACE in that scene, all contorted and confused!
:-))
Fuck Ellin, you're writing the show from now on.
Oooh yes, I'd love to! Though in a way I hardly think my touch is necessary, considering slashiness aleady pervades the show. :-)
octopuses?(octopi?)
I almost took that out! Now I'm glad I didn't. :-)
That's such a deeply married thing to do.
I love the way they are with each other in canon - they're so comfortable with each other that they have no personal space whatsoever, and most of the time they don't have to talk to communicate. They know each other so well, and are so important to each other... in every way except the sex, they're married in canon. :-)
Damn, I love this show.
The sniff - you are SO gone Vince. *ruffles his hair*
He so is! But don't even think about pulling on the hair. ;-)
That is such an unbelievably cute detail.
I'm very glad you like the dinosaurs! I wanted them to have some moments of comfortable best-friend-type interaction, and thought that two guys who'd grown up together as they have must have long-standing discussions going about important topics like this. :-)
LOVE LOVE LOVE. I cannot wait to read more from you. Holy crap.
(I apologize for the late answer - LJ didn't send me a comment notification and I only noticed your feedback now!)
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You are amazing. Have you written any more Entourage fic?
Unfortunately, this is my only Entourage story to date - maybe more will follow once the next season airs...
The tie-tying, the sniffing, the cake text message!
*g*
Thank you for your wonderful feedback. :-)
OH yeah and it was also wonderfully fucking hot. nice writing. =]
I'm very glad you enjoyed the story - and that you thought it was hot! Thank you for your lovely feedback. :-)
Okay, I have to sya that after all the hot sex and fantastic dialogue (wonderfully in-character, from the pauses and phrasing to the language used), that heading had me a little worried that the ending wouldn't be happy. But it was wonderful!
Sorry about worrying you with the last heading. *g* And thank you for your lovely feedback!
Thank you so much for taking the time to comment again. :-) It's wonderful to hear that the story does well on the second reading, too!